Can see what you are doing here, but will your other readers? You will need to explain more what hypertext is rather than assume that we all have gone to Brown or know where it is and that we all now smirk glintingly about our days of polished text vivisection. Seriously, use your value-loaded adjectives sparingly and allowing your reader to understand their full sense if you must use them: 'shiny' jars. I realise these are your notes, but then my comment is meant to prepare you for the real argument-making.
